Walt: We are learning to create a recount about our holidays
Our teacher Ms Peters wanted my class to create a recount on our holidays so here was the one I made.
Reflection: I thought I did a really good job on my recount, maybe I could've added a bit more next time I do something like these.
Kia ora Hayden, I really like the presentation of your Holiday highlights and how you put in the effort to include images, a coloured text box and easy to read text. You did well to write a descriptive recount using the five senses and Show, Don't tell. Maybe next time proofread, to check your writing makes sense and has the correct punctuation. Keep up the good effort! Blog ya later, Ms Peters.
ReplyDeleteKia ora Hayden, it´s Pounamu. I liked your holiday recount but maybe next time maybe you could add some more punctuation and make the background more brighter so it stands out more.
ReplyDeleteKIA Ora I'm Jahkaya from Oturu school. talking about food made me very hungry
ReplyDeleteI really liked your post next time maybe you could add something that is not about food
Hi Hayden my name is Poet and I am a year 6 at Paihia School. I like your blog post about “Holiday Recount” because the way you described it was very descriptive and I could picture it in my head I also liked your Google drawing you made about your holiday.
ReplyDeleteWas your holiday fun?
Kia ora Hayden my name is Calais and I’m a year 8 from Paihia School. I like your blog post about “Holiday Recount” because the way you described it was very descriptive and I could imagine the holiday in my head, I also liked your Google drawing you made about your holiday.
ReplyDeleteWas your holiday fun?